Tuesday, October 23, 2007

Thesis Statements - Animal Farm 4

We need to work on developing strong thesis statements, boys. It's Animal Farm time again. Choose an important character and develop a solid thesis statement. Remember, you need a subject and an assertion (argument, opinion).
1. Your thesis should not be a statement of fact.
2. You can use the character you chose for your test essay, or you can try a different one.
3. Participants on this blog should help revise the thesis statements until we have at least 6 excellent statements about 6 different characters.

I will post this blog 4 times, inviting a different group to each.

59 comments:

Tyrel said...

my thesis statement is

Because Boxer is gulliable & naiive role model, Napoleon can use Boxer to get the other animals to look up to Napoleon.

Tyrel said...

is a gulliable & naiive role model, sry

Tyrel said...

Or,

Napoleon does change over time as suggested by his increasingly cruel behavior

James said...

Here is my thesis statement...

Boxer, with his two maxims "I will work harder" and "Comrade Napoleon is always right" is a gullible but fierce horse whom the animals look up to and Napoleon uses.

DavidG said...

Heres my thesis statement for Napoleon.

Napoleon, the head pig in Orwell's Animal farm, uses violence, and deception to gain absolute power over the animals.

Then my facts of that would be, the apples and the milk event, the slaughter of the animals, and the death of Boxer.

DavidG said...

And for Snowball i have...

In Orwell's Animal Farm, Snowball uses determination, and intelligence to bring success to Animal Farm.

My facts would be, He makes all the plans for instance the windmill, teaches animals to read and write, and speaks eloquently with great vocab that the other animals don't even understand.

hakeem said...

My thesis statement is:

all though Napoleon is the leader, he's nothing without the dogs and squealer

hakeem said...

Squealer does do all of the talking and persuading. The dogs are what v scares all of the animals into submission. Napoleon stands there and watches what happens.

hakeem said...

david, i think you should also talk about how how all of the things that snowball does shows that he cares about the animal farm and that he supports true animalism.

hakeem said...

james, think that your thesis is too factual. say something like, boxer's gulibilaty and maxims are what him so easy for napoleon to manipulate.

hakeem said...

tyrel, i like your thesis statement.
it seems easy to work on to me.

James said...

Also, for my thesis statement, my facts were that they mention Boxer's two maxims and he says them to the animals to encourage them, and when he nearly killed the man in the Battle of Cowshed.

elliot said...

Here is my thesis. In Orwell's Animal Farm, Boxer's, a powerful horse's, maxims mean that he would follow Napoleon off a cliff. Do you like it? By the way this is how gullible is spelled. I found Tyrel's thesis especially interesting. It could be better though. It probably be more specific. Do you agree? Why? Why not?

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Christian Lange said...

My thesis statement is as follows. Boxer, the powerful carthorse in George Orwell's Animal Farm, is used by Napoleon as a puppet because of his popularity with the other animals. Too factual?

Tyrel said...

mines is

Squealer's talent to persuade people into what he says and his ability to weave words into the minds of animals gives Napoleon a great advantage power-wise

examples:
Changing the seven commandments, Taking away Snowball's Animal Hero status, the milk and apples

Tyrel said...

it's pretty hard to create a short thesis (sentence-wise) Mine's just keeps going and going. Does anybody feel that way?

Tyrel said...

C Lange
ur thesis isn't very factual, but it doesn't take a rocket scientist to figure it out

Tyrel said...

i also find it that when you try to get specific with your thesis, it becomes fact instead of opinion

DavidG said...

Well i think its kind of in the middle because i can think of anything to counter your opinion. SO to me i think its to factual to use. You should say somthing like this.

Boxer, the powerful carthorse in Orwell's Animal Farm, is to naive, and gullible to realize what Napoleon is doing to him.
Please tell me u differ in opinion for Christian's thesis.

DavidG said...

and guys tell me if im wrong because this stuff is kind of hard. For me at least.

Tyrel said...

sry if my comment hurt you C Lange, but what i'm trying to say is that it could be more discreet (not so obvious)

Tyrel said...

he isnt too naiive because he thinks for himself.

Example: Boxer questions Squealer when he says that Snowball is bad and was in plotting with Jones since the beginning.

Tyrel said...

David G.

A thesis statement can't be wrong, because it's an opinion and opinions cant be wrong. As long as u can show evidence that supports your thesis, than you're okay

Tyrel said...

David, for example, I can say that New Orleans is very unlucky. U might say no.
My example: Hurricane Katrina

Tyrel said...

also, new orleans has the highest crime rate in the country

Tyrel said...

Also, the new orleans Saints's combined season record over their franchise history is 115-213 or something close to that

elliot said...

That's not true, just because someone thinks something doesn't mean it is true. That's a very interesting thought though. You also have to remember that some evidence can be misinterpreted or misleading. Do know what I mean?

elliot said...

That provided me with a good example Tyrel. You may say those unlucky things but someone else can say twice as many things that are lucky. Do you understand?

Tyrel said...

Can anybody make a thesis statement about Benjamin?

elliot said...

Benjamin knows what is happening to Animalism the whole time. There you go, a thesis about Benjamin. Let's pull it a part.

Tyrel said...

elliot, the facts I provided are true but what Ms. Lukas has been saying since day uno is that OPINIONS AREN'T A STATEMENT OF FACT!!!! (i capped on purpose)

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Tyrel said...

Benjamin isn't intimidated by Napoleon's scare tactics. How about that??

elliot said...

You doubled that one Tyrel. I can give back up though. All along the book has been saying that benjamin says he knows what is happening. Ergo he knows what is going on in Animal Farm. Do you see what I mean?

elliot said...

I agree, that might have been better, however is that really important enough for a thesis. Why not come up with another one?

Tyrel said...

No one really thought about benjamin on the test

Tyrel said...

wat does ergo mean?

David Lawson said...

My thesis statement for Napoleon. "In Orwell's Animal Farm, Napoleon, the lead pig, using his power, becomes more tricky and vicious as the book goes on.
Please feel free to comment (cause i never get any)

Ms. Lukas said...

First, you're doing well on these - just be sure you're clear. Sometimes I don't understand what you're referring to.

As for opinions, Tyrel, you said that an opinion can't be wrong. What do the rest of you think? If my opinion is that all girls are smarter than any boy, can you say my opinion is wrong? If so, what makes it possible to say so?

Do you see that evidence, proof, supporting examples are what give opinions their validity? Otherwise an opinion is meaningless. It holds no weight whatsoever. Think of it like a court of law, boys. You can be of the opinion that Johnny Rich stole Thomas Pill's car, but unless you can prove your opinion with evidence, you can't convict Johnny and your opinion doesn't matter at all.

hasani said...

Boxer would be a good leader for aimal farm because he is pasionate, strong, motavational, and he is kind eve though he isn't the brightest bulb in the bunch.

Hasani

hasani said...

Napoleon is a tyranical and greedy leader (If i can call im that much) who is only interested in what decisions would benefit the other pigs and himself.

Hasani

hasani said...

Squealer s the puppet of the show and is only used to get Napolen's unjust rules and laws through the ears of the other animals so Napoleon can sit on a higher thrown.

hasani said...

An example as to why Boxer would be a good leader is when he uses his phrase "I will work harder" (pg 47) it motivates the other animals and mkes the think that all their efforts will pay off soon. Also After the Battle of Cowshed, Boxer was sad because he thought he had killed a human and e didn't intened to. Plus he was so sad the he strated to cry.

Hasani

hasani said...

david L, what are some examples of Napoleon using his power to become more vicious? I can think of a couple, can you?

garrett said...

Even though Boxer is a very strong and hard working horse, he is very gulliable and can be tricked by any leader to do what they want him to do

garrett said...

Napoleon is not a good leader for animal farm because he steals from the farm and never helps the animals.

David Lawson said...

Yes Hasani....

Some examples are:
-when he made that wierd noise and the dogs went after Snowball
-When he starts to murder all the hens, and all the other executions
-When he calls the horse slaughterer on Boxer
Be free to add anything on anybody

Also, Garrett, I think your thesis statements are good, but there too facty. Try and put more of an opinion in it.

elliot said...

By the way David, Napoleon didn't send Boxer to the horse slaughterer he sent him to the glue factory. I really have to say that, that is horrible. Because, Boxer, in my opinion is the only that stood between the animals end death during those years of building the windmill. Hey, that might make a good thesis statement. Boxer is the only obstacle that stands between death and the animals during the building of the windmill. If you agree do you have anything to support it? Do you agree?

David Lawson said...

Yes I do agree Elliot. Also thanks for helping me with the slaughterer.

David Lawson said...

This is my thesis statement fo Boxer. In Orwell's Animal Farm, Boxer, the lead horse, is easy to persuade, which makes him a threat to all the animals.

DavidG said...

So right now we need everybody to make a thesis statement so right after this blog can you please put ONLY your thesis statement. After we must look at every1's correct untill they are all perfect, and are all opinions, and then we are done so Ill start with mine

DavidG said...

Napoleon, the head pig in Orwell's Animal farm, uses violence, and deception to gain absolute power over the animals.

David Lawson said...

Does anyone have any comments on my Boxer thesis statement, because I would really like some corrections to make it even better.

nickm said...

i think that if any thing david your boxer thesis statement is to opionated, but could you explain why he is threat to all animals. i think that he is definatly a threat to napoleon because napoleon is the one who really rides on most of these characters.

nickm said...

mabey this is better david: Napoleon, the lead pig in George Orwell's Animal farm, uses violence, deception and cunning, to gain absolute believe-ability over the animals.

David Lawson said...

That's very good Nick, but that's not what im saying.
Also, he reasons why he is a threat is because, he is very gulible, so hell do anything napoleon tells him to do which is bad because napoleon is a bad leader. So when he does what Napoleon says, he could do something really bad to the animals, maybe even make there life at risk.

Ms. Lukas said...

Okay, boys. Now it's time to come up with a list of 6 of these, all revised to be as concise, precise, and workable as you can make them. You'll need to figure out how to do this so that the final list is one that everyone agrees to. After that, the blog is closed.

Ms. Lukas said...

BLOG CLOSED.